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No Captain Left Behind (7793 words) by kyburg
Chapters: 1/10
Fandom: The Avengers (Marvel Movies), Iron Man (Movies), Captain America (Movies)
Rating: Teen And Up Audiences
Warnings: Author Chose Not To Use Archive Warnings, No Archive Warnings Apply
Relationships: Pepper Potts/Tony Stark, Steve Rogers & Tony Stark, Bruce Banner & Tony Stark, Steve Rogers & Bruce Banner, Clint Barton/Natasha Romanov, Thor - Relationship, Nick Fury - Relationship, Happy Hogan - Relationship, Pepper Potts & Natasha Romanov
Characters: Tony Stark, Bruce Banner, Steve Rogers, Nick Fury, Pepper Potts, Natasha Romanov, Clint Barton, Thor, Happy Hogan
Additional Tags: Iron Man Three Compliant, PTSD, Science Bros, filling in the blanks, what spackle won't patch, moving forward, wicked girls saving themselves, Deep Breath Before Winter Soldier, Deep Breath beforer Dark World, Steve is a BAMF, So is Bruce, Tony the facilitator, Pepper is a BAMF, and a den mother, Clint is An Asshole, Some days Natasha IS Stark Industries, Tony Stark Has Issues, Steve Rogers Has Issues, Clint Barton has more Issues than the Library of Congress, Stark Tower has a Starbucks, Tony Stark Does Not Have to Put Up with Your Shit, Romance is more than Sex Done Well, Love comes in many flavors, So do anxiety disorders, Natasha is not a robot, Grieving, Pepperony, Clintasha
Summary:
Post IM3. Returning to New York after settling the second Stark Tower in Eureka, Tony Stark is called to an informal conference, an 'information exchange' at an office near the UN, that also includes Nick Fury, Steve Rogers and Dr. Bruce Banner.
What he finds going into the meeting (he's fashionably late, of course - contractor!) leaves him wondering just what has been going on in New York in his absence; Steve Rogers is dismissed as incompetent, Dr. Bruce Banner unsafe without specific escorts (and he keeps falling asleep), Clint Barton is at the Tower but still on the off duty roster (crazy doesn't begin to describe it) and Natasha Romanov is even scarier (and harder to read) than usual. Nick Fury isn't saying much, except fix it - to which Bruce says - sure! It sounds like a reasonable plan - tutor Steve Rogers into the 21st Century, and who better to do it than the 'science twins?' It'll be fun!
Team building, anxiety disorders, homework and field trips. Welcome to Stark Tower, New York. Welcome home.
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Loving the content and what you're going for.
Some writing notes:
You've got the common problem of swapping voices and viewpoint characters a little too fast for the reader to keep up. Next edit pass, you want to make sure the "Tony said "Steve thought" and so on are all there marking what you need to show. You hear their voices in your head and know who is who, but we can't hear them and can't always keep up. Swapping a reader into another viewpoint is a tricky thing; do it between scene shifts or at least a clearly marked paragraph swap, and don't do it every other line. Go to omnipotent if you want glimpses of what's in everyone's heads at once, but don't jump around between people's heads too fast. This one could probably be entirely from Tony's viewpoint without missing too much. (And I'd love to see later scenes from the other characters' views as well, and the subtle differences between what X sees versus what Y sees.)
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A couple of hours, and things got a whole lot more fun. Thanks for the advice!
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Also? Craving grilled cheese sandwiches ever since, and/or wanting to make one for Steve. All your fault. (And I ate them for dinner tonight, with soup. Mmm.)
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Story is going to have a ton of food - and music - so hang on for the ride!